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Forgive me for bothering you, but the head of the Graphics Design Department at Northwestern College has asked if we might possibly be interested in perhaps offering internship opportunities to strong candidates from the university’s program.
Creating internship positions may present a decent opportunity for us and Northwestern. Interns might:
- Allow us an opportunity to work with potential employees.
- Work on tasks you assign.
- Maybe even give you up to 20 hours of work per week.
If you find time in your busy schedule, you might consider reviewing Northwestern’s policies for internships as well as my formal proposal for establishing internship positions in our office. Both documents are attached.
I’m happy to answer any questions you might have about my proposal.
Please let me know of your decision whenever works best for you, but by January 15 might be best because that is Northwestern’s deadline for credited internships in the spring semester.