3 Ways to Improve Your Writing Style

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—Bite-sized advice for better business writing—

April 11, 2019 

3 Ways to Improve Your Writing Style

“The finest language is mostly made up of simple unimposing words.”

— George Eliot

In fashion, style is easy to define: It’s simply your choice and combination of clothing and accessories. In writing, style is similar: It’s the words you choose and the way you put them together to create a unique impact.

Effective writing style reflects well on you and conveys your message in a clear, professional manner. Use these tips to develop your style.

1. Avoid short, choppy sentences.

Too many short sentences in a row create a jolting style:

Product output is currently too low. We plan to streamline our production process. This will improve our line efficiency.

By combining the ideas, you can make one smooth sentence with effective style.

We plan to streamline our production process to improve efficiency and raise product output.

2. Use the active voice.

In a passive sentence, the subject receives the action of the verb. Note how passive verbs (in bold) make these sentences sluggish and wordy:

The workers were instructed by the manufacturer.

The meeting was chaired by the CFO.

You can energize a sentence by asking “who or what is doing the action of the verb” and making your answer the new subject.

The manufacturer instructed the workers.

The CFO chaired the meeting.

(View "Active and Passive Sentences" for more examples.)

3. Review your word choice.

Are your terms appropriate for the reader, or do you tend to use overinflated words that make your writing sound pompous?

Writers should obviate obfuscation.

Obviate obfuscation? Huh? Instead of using obscure words, select plain, precise terms.  

Keep in mind your goal of presenting a clear message with confidence, and your personal style will always come through.

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Play the Editor!

Copy this text into a document and add, delete, and rearrange material to create an effective style. (Scroll to the bottom to see our recommendation.) 

Our facility was recently inspected. The inspection took place this past Friday, July 15. The state Department of Trade and Consumer Protection (TCP) conducted it. I shall communicate the salient inspection discoveries.

The agreeable news is that no problems were found that will prohibit our eventual licensing. The crummy news is that three problem areas were cited that will cause a moratorium on our licensing.

Before we can commence canning and baking for commercial sale, the following actions will need to be taken by us:
  1. The east-wall counter surfaces must be converted to stainless steel for disinfection purposes.
  2. Overhead lighting must be upgraded for safe food handling.
  3. Electric service to the large ovens must be reconfigured.
Suggestions or queries should be sent to me or Matt Bleeke.
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Editor's Recommendation

This past Friday, July 15, the state Department of Trade and Consumer Protection (TCP) inspected our facility. I’m writing to share the inspection results.

The good news is that the TCP did not find problems that will prohibit our eventual licensing. The bad news is that the inspectors cited three problem areas that will delay our licensing.

Before we can begin canning and baking for commercial sale, we will need to take the following actions:

  1. Convert the east-wall counter surfaces to stainless steel for disinfection purposes. 
  2. Upgrade the overhead lighting for safe food handling. 
  3. Reconfigure the electric service to the large ovens.

If you have suggestions or questions, please contact me or Matt Bleeke.