As you probably know, friction slows objects in motion. In writing, wordiness and passive constructions have a similar effect. These sentence problems make ideas harder to understand, forcing readers to slow down.
You can energize your writing and improve the clarity of your ideas by avoiding hidden verbs, expletives, and the passive voice.
Avoid Hidden Verbs (Nominalizations)
A nominalization is a verb that has been turned into a noun. Find the hidden verb and use it to revise your sentence.
Sluggish: I gave a description of the product.
Energetic: I described the product.
Sluggish: We provided our client with a recommendation for a new investment strategy.
Energetic: We recommended a new investment strategy for our client.
Expletives are filler words such as it is and there is. They serve no purpose in most sentences. Remove the expletive to energize the sentence.
Sluggish: It is certain we will finish on budget.
Energetic: We certainly will finish on budget.
Sluggish: There is also our adherence to the deadline.
Energetic: We also will adhere to the deadline.
Make Passive Sentences Active
Passive voice means the subject of the sentence is being acted upon rather than doing the action. Find out what is doing the action and make it the subject.
Passive: The meeting will be attended by Sonja.
Active: Sonja will attend the meeting.
Passive: A great time was had by everyone.
Active: Everyone had a great time.